Our second draft video:
My first thought about this edit is how we still have the off continuity at the start between the two different siren scores. This needs to be edited out so the mood is set with smooth sound bridges. I like how the track of the bodies has been sped up.This allows the viewer to see the body but at a better pace to create a tense mood. It also makes it fast pace and creates distortion. We added flashes as transitions, they represent camera flashes in an evidential photograph at a crime scene. We followed convention by adding in pictures connected by string. This has been seen in many thriller films and can show the personally or insanity of a murderer.
We asked 4 questions on google classroom:
What did you like about the title sequence?
The main complement was about out editing style. I agree it is unique and it does fit with the crime thriller genre quite well. Some also said they would want to see the complete film and that we had a unique style. Music was another of the best comments we received. Around 85% of our audience commented it that it fit our genre, the idea and it was a good choice of royalty free music. Around 20% commented on our use of make up , titles and narrative idea.
What would you highlight as our main improvement?
This feedback gave us a much wider range of things we could improve. These were; add a colour grade, mess up the newspapers, add a voice over, add a variation of shots and shorten some shots. I like the idea of adding a colour grade because it will make the over all lighting darker, which is good as our lighting was very white. It would also add a sinister tone if we were to use a red colour grade. For us to change the newspapers we would have to reshoot that scene, we did not do because we felt it wasn’t necessary. We were planning to include a voice over at this stage as we feel it would help with understanding the narrative.
Please comment on the mise en scene (good/bad)
The feedback for our use of mise en scene was very positive. 50% of the comments said it was a good choice of location and that time and effort was put in to find it. I feel our choice of location was really good as it inspired at title and allowed us to taking common codes and conventions from crime thrillers. 30% of our audience though it was an effective title sequence and that the music, make up and props contributed to it. One improvement for our mise en scene was to add more blood. The victims were strangled, not injured that could inflict blood. This is a lack of narrative is cause of our missing voice over.
What genre does it belong to?
Our thriller is in the hybrid of crime and mystery thrillers.95% of the audience felt it was a crime thriller. I agree with them as I do feel it gives a crime thriller feel. Few thought it was a mystery thriller, which it could be as in the voice over it will state the girls are missing. Comments also said horror or sci-fi thriller. This must be because of the dead element and perhaps the music and the mark contribute to the sci fi idea.